How you plan to incorporate your classmates’ workshop comments to strengthen your essay? Again, reference specific you received during the workshop and explain how you plan to use the advice they offer.
In order to improve my essay I will try to make whatever changes my classmates suggest. Since they are reading with an open mind and have no connection to the essay they can make the technical changes that I do not notice as the writer. Also, they notice the little details that do not make sense and can suggest ways to fix it. One comment that I will use to improve my work is the comment that suggests I split my paragraph into two separate paragraphs. The editor said that my paragraph seemed to be very long and would be an easier read if it was two paragraphs. I agree with this since my paragraph is a full page. Another thing I will fix is adding more quotes to my work. I have quite a few but in order to strengthen my point more would be beneficial.
