In my second essay my two biggest global changes involved adding quotes to my essay. By doing this, in both cases, it made my argument stronger. The new quotes supported what I was saying and also incorporated the authors opinions. The first quote I added was from Richtel. He was making a counterargument to what I am saying about technology. This goes to show that not everyone shares the same idea of the changes of technology on our brains. The second quote was about attention deficit. I already had a quote that mentioned attention deficit, but by adding a second one it shows that more than one person supports the idea. I believe that these two adjustments really helped my paper.
