In my second essay my two biggest global changes involved adding quotes to my essay. By doing this, in both cases, it made my argument stronger. The new quotes supported what I was saying and also incorporated the authors opinions. The first quote I added was from Richtel. He was making a counterargument to what … [Read more…]
Write a 250-300 word revision plan for your essay that addresses specific comments from your peers and how you might attend to them. Also, address the bigger-picture needs of your essay as you move into a new draft. Going from my first draft to second draft I will be focusing on rewording my sentences so … [Read more…]
Through my peer editing I think I made good comments to help my classmate progress in her writing. On the first page I made an evidence based comment where I suggested that she mention the increase in attention disorders. This is something that Richtel mentioned in his article. I think it will support the argument … [Read more…]
After reading through the comments on my first essay, the one thing I must work on most is using multiple authors ideas to compare and contrast on one idea. I did a good job of using the authors opinions to support my idea, but I did not show how the authors opinions differed. There was … [Read more…]
